Thanks for fixing everything; hope it's okay Jefferson pops up instead. Try to avoid putting yourself as a narrator in your posts (as in, sort of breaking the fourth wall) and be careful with staying in third person. Other than that, you're doing fine so far. 
Jefferson was the solitary type, bred to independence since the onset of his amnesia. What kind of creature had Maluki been? Laruku had spoken of him as peppy, the social type; with madness that was stolen away, warped into something cruel and demonic, and mellowed only when the creature lost his memories entirely. Jefferson had been created then, the lonely, scarred idiot, and chose to walk the earth alone. He enjoyed peace, he enjoyed freedom, he enjoyed being left to his lonesome. He didn't much enjoy interruptions, and he didn't much enjoy loud noises.
Thus, when he made his appearance at the borders in response to the call made there, the three-legged gimp looked hardly welcoming. A grimace on his scarred features, the cyclops glared his glowing green eye at the stranger and grunted. "Fucking noisy," he muttered, barely audible. "You have business here?"
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