04-21-2011, 02:19 PM
Hey there!
Thanks for your interest in joining us here.
You can put the character information, such as Appearance, into your Profile via your User Control Panel. While most of your application looks good, there are a few things we need to address before we can accept you into the game.
Thanks for your interest in joining us here.
You can put the character information, such as Appearance, into your Profile via your User Control Panel. While most of your application looks good, there are a few things we need to address before we can accept you into the game.- Your roleplaying samples are not quite up to par and need a bit of work -- there are a numerous spelling and grammar errors in your post that need to be worked out. In addition, they're all a bit below the word count for our joining procedure. Post-acceptance, we don't have a hard-line minimum enforced here, but we encourage players to strive for 200 words (2 paragraphs) while posting, as that seems to be the right amount of detail for fellow roleplayers to work off of. You can browse around the IC forums to see the general length and quality people write at here.
If you'd like more specific assistance with improving your samples, check the Questions and Help forum, specifically the Mentors -- they'll check over everything for you and make sure it's just right. - Additionally -- eye color changes can't occur because of temperature, as it's not a realistic feature. Slight eye color changes (such as similar/close shades of blue) due to lighting are acceptable.