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A few days ago i decided to change my character's biography a bit. There are not radical changes though. But i would like someone to review this for me in case that there is something that should be changed. So please, would you check it out for me? X3


Luna doesn't remember anything before her first five months of life. The only thing that she remembers is her mother running, holding her against her chest and breathing heavily. Before that, her mind is blank.

During her childhood she lived with her mother, Sofía, in the middle of a forest in Otawa. Despite living alone, Sofía always checked that her daughter didn't lack of anything, hunting by herself to feed them both. Since young, Luna proved being a fast learner, for she learnt to read even before she was able to shift. And soon, she developed a passion for herbolary. Sofía was a skilled healer, and she introduced her daughter into this practice since she showed interest for it. She thaught Luna how to distinguish different kinds of healing plants that grew in the surroundings and how to use them.

When Luna turned one year old, her mother decided that she was old enough to wander with her to find other wolves; so both females left their small shelter, with the purpose of finding a permanent family in their minds. During that time, Luna improved her skills as a hunter as well as a healer, since her mother often showed her new kinds of plants. They wandered for several weeks until they reached an abandoned city. The place was inhabited by other canines, who formed some kind of society. The females were warmly welcomed by the residents, and they were given permission to stay for as long as they wanted. Sofía chose a store in an abandoned mall centre as their residence, and they established here. During the next few days, when both of them went sightseeing around the city, they met many other people. But one of the residents, a coywolf named Ursus, was the one who simpathysed with them the most. He showed them the rest of the city, as well as the water fountains and the best hunting places.

To their surprise, Ursus lived only a few stores away from Sofía's and Luna's residence, so, as the days passed, he hung around with them, chatting and telling each other stories. With time, Ursus began to develop feelings for Sofía, who developed feelings for him as well. Soon, they became mates. As for Luna, she began to become independent. She often explored the city, making friends and spending her time with them. It was only a matter of time that the founded a mate, which she did. His name was Liam, a loner wolf and a musician. Luna loved him as well as his music, which encouraged her to find a hidden talent. Dance. The couple was often seen in the forest, Liam playing a flute and Luna dancing beside him. Sofía and Ursus, who already saw Luna as his own daughter, approved their relation, saying that Liam was an adorable guy. And after several months, the couple was already planning to live together in order to start a family. But eight months after the arrival to the city, the situation gave a sharp turn.

One morning, when Luna went to visit Liam, she didn't found hi anywhere. She walked around the city, thinking that she would find him there, but she eventually didn't. Even some of her friends joined the search. He didn't appear, and Luna was about to give up. But then she found him. Liam was dead and his torn corpse had been dumped in an alley. Luna was completely shocked. She just stood there for a few seconds, until he saw a shadow moving in the back of the alley. In that moment Luna ran away. She kept running, pushed by adrenaline, until she reached her home. There, she fainted. Her mother and Ursus where really worried. And the explanation came a few minutes later when a friend of Luna, who had found Liam's corpse after she did, told them what had happened. Sofía feared that her daughter would loose her memmory when she woke up, so she decided to change the truth. When Luna finally woke up she barely had memories of Liam, to everybody's surprise, so she didn't even ask about him. So they didn't tell her anything. Later on, Luna came to the conclusion that Liam had disappeared a long time ago.

But Liam's murder was only the first of several cases like that. The residents were very scared, so, one by one, they left the place. Luna and her family were some of the last ones who left, heading to the place where everything began. The old cottage.

Once settled, they began to continue with their life as a family. And pretty soon, Sofía got pregnant again. Luna was excited at the idea of having siblings, since she loved pups. She helped her mother during the pregnancy and the delivery. But after they borned, her mother and adoptive father paid more attention to the pups than to her. The young female then realized that it was time for her to take off and find a family of her own. Neither Ursus or Sofía was very happy with the idea, but they decided to lt her go. But before she left, Sofía packed a few things for Luna. A book (about medicine), a skirt that she had found during their stance in the city, her own journal, and a letter, making Luna promise that she should not open the letter until she found her family. With those gifts, Luna parted. She wandered for several months...until she found 'Souls.

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