04-07-2009, 01:31 PM
So, Leucion is going to be my next charater, once I've had Vuk long enough to be allowed to make another. So, you guys have any constructive criticism to help me make her better?
Name: Leucion Ir'all A'hriar
Gender: Female
Age: 2 years, one month
Birthdate: March 1, 2007
Relations:
Father: Leucient
Status: Deceased
Mother: Lucelia
Status: Unknown
Sister: Loria
Status: Unknown
Luperci: Luperci Ortus (Father)
Appearance:
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Family-
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Right= Leucient (Father) Center= Lucelia (Mother) Left= Loria (Sister)
Lupus:
She is a smallish, lean-bodied wolf. In her Lupus form, she is about 27 inches tall, about 64 inches long, and weighs around 57 pounds, give or take a few depending on the time of her last meal. Her pelt is a deep, rich cocoa brown all over her entire body. Her "hair" is not visible in her lupus form, short and hidden by her normal coat. She's of a thin build because she's more of a sprinter or a runner than anything else. Her paws are small, making her good at the whole stealth thing. She has dyed-on markings on her head: the front and tope of her muzzle, and her ears. They mark her as of the ShadowPath clan, to which her mother and father's families had belonged. Her mother's were sea-green, and her father's were royal blue, both colors of high families, and as such, her and her sister's were teal, a combination of their parents, to show the joining of the two families. Her's are more blue than her sisters, symbolizing her status of both first born and of high blood, as well as the fact that she takes more after her father in appearance.
Secui:
In her Secui form, she is about 32 and a half inches tall, around 89 inches long, and she weighs around 148 pounds, making her about medium-small compaired to larger individuals. Her "hair" is longer in this form, actually visible, and she sometimes wears it down in her Secui form. When she does, it reaches her shoulder, or there about. Her hair is dyed a light, silvery platinum blond, because it suits her eyes, which are a startlingly light, icy blue in color. Her "hair" is long in the back, down to her paws, almost, and in the front her bangs hang to her jaw line and are swept to one side of her face.
Optime:
In her Optime form, she is about 6'4", making her of about medium-small height, ans she weighs around 196 pounds, a bit light, as she's built for speed, not strength. Her hair falls to her lower back in this form, and she normally wears it up in a ponytail, minus the long, side-swept bangs.
Physical Weaknesses:
She's light-weight, built for speed, not strength. She's kind of like a cheetah, in that she has good stamina for moderate speeds, or can sprint for very short periods of time before having to stop, catch her breath, and refuel.
Biography:
She was born to Lucelia Ir'all of the ShadowPath clan, along with her sister Loria, in a faraway land (the Peruvian Amazon). Their father, Leucient Ah'riar, had died of a snake bite four months before. For her first year, she stayed with her mother and her sister, and the rest of the clan.
When Leucion and Loria were about a year and two months old, a nomadic pack decided to try to winter in the Clan's terriotories. Their mother, as the head of the PeacePath of the Council, tried to negotiate terms with the pack's alpha. The wolf refused to cooperate, he and his pack thinking they could stand against the clan. A brief war followed, and by breif I mean that it lasted about two months. The WarPath, lead by her father, and including Leucion herself, defeated the small pack, wiping them out, but not before a rebellious faction of the PeacePath seperated from the pack and left halfway through the war, sick and tired of the violent ways of the WarPath. Loria was among the dissedents. Leucion hasn't seen her since.
She spent another six months with her mother and the Clan before finally deciding that it was time to move on. After all, her mother and her had begun to argue constantly, and she didn't get along with any of the other females in the Clan, so she decided that life would be less troublign i she were on her own.
Three months ago, she found her way here, to this land, and has decided that, come hell or high water, or both, she's tired of moving around, and that she's going to stay, right here, until, and if, life presents her with some incentive to change her mind.
Personality:
Typically, she is calm and friendly. She seems rough-and-tumble on the outside, humorous, sometimes morbid, and sometimes apathetic; this is a facade. In reality, she is sensitive, easily hurt, and very emotional, but she doesn't let anyone see this side of her, because, even though she's never been hurt emotionally befre, she's still afraid of it. She is easily angered, though she usually doesn't show it. It builds up inside of her, and she does her best to resist it. When she gets reallly angry, she starts to cry silently, and that's her cue to run before she blows up and hurts herself or someone else. She is very proud, stubbornly proud, and she sometime lets it get to her head. She has a very strong will, or, at least she acts like it, and goes through with her decisions, no matter how badly she's beating herself up on the inside. She is dreadfully afraid of snakes. Her mother instilled that fear into both Leucion and Loria with the stories of how their father had died. As she never had a father figure, she craves approval from male or father-like figures when in a family or pack-like group of individuals. All in all, she is a fairly down to earth girl. Having spent so much time in such a large communal familial group, she is comfortable among crowds, and she is supportive of strict, but fair rules and a council-style government.
Skills:
She is fast, really fast, and stealthy. She knows a little about healing, but not much, and she knows how to sew (though she's not quite sure when she picked that one up). She can read in English, and write, sort of, though it's easier to read chicken-scratch than her scribbles. She's good at wood-working. She makes her own fishing spears that she fishes and hunts small game with. After all, she's built for speed, not strength, and it doesn't take much strength to throw a sharp stick at a rabbit or a fish. She also employs a slingshot for bird hunting. She can make simple furniture, like tables or chairs, but there's always room for improvement. She can climb very well, and it's sort of a hobby of her's.
Fishing spear:
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Slingshot:
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Deficiencies:
She is easily angered, though she usually doesn't show it. It builds up inside of her, and she does her best to resist it. When she gets reallly angry, she starts to cry silently, and that's her cue to run before she blows up and hurts herself or someone else. She is stubbornly proud, sometimes to the point of mule-headedness and ensuing trouble. She can't swim very well, though she can float, and she's clumsy on slick ground, what with her small paws, and she also she has trouble walking in snow or sandy soil. She's dreadfully afraid of snakes.
Name: Leucion Ir'all A'hriar
Gender: Female
Age: 2 years, one month
Birthdate: March 1, 2007
Relations:
Father: Leucient
Status: Deceased
Mother: Lucelia
Status: Unknown
Sister: Loria
Status: Unknown
Luperci: Luperci Ortus (Father)
Appearance:
Family-
Right= Leucient (Father) Center= Lucelia (Mother) Left= Loria (Sister)
Lupus:
She is a smallish, lean-bodied wolf. In her Lupus form, she is about 27 inches tall, about 64 inches long, and weighs around 57 pounds, give or take a few depending on the time of her last meal. Her pelt is a deep, rich cocoa brown all over her entire body. Her "hair" is not visible in her lupus form, short and hidden by her normal coat. She's of a thin build because she's more of a sprinter or a runner than anything else. Her paws are small, making her good at the whole stealth thing. She has dyed-on markings on her head: the front and tope of her muzzle, and her ears. They mark her as of the ShadowPath clan, to which her mother and father's families had belonged. Her mother's were sea-green, and her father's were royal blue, both colors of high families, and as such, her and her sister's were teal, a combination of their parents, to show the joining of the two families. Her's are more blue than her sisters, symbolizing her status of both first born and of high blood, as well as the fact that she takes more after her father in appearance.
Secui:
In her Secui form, she is about 32 and a half inches tall, around 89 inches long, and she weighs around 148 pounds, making her about medium-small compaired to larger individuals. Her "hair" is longer in this form, actually visible, and she sometimes wears it down in her Secui form. When she does, it reaches her shoulder, or there about. Her hair is dyed a light, silvery platinum blond, because it suits her eyes, which are a startlingly light, icy blue in color. Her "hair" is long in the back, down to her paws, almost, and in the front her bangs hang to her jaw line and are swept to one side of her face.
Optime:
In her Optime form, she is about 6'4", making her of about medium-small height, ans she weighs around 196 pounds, a bit light, as she's built for speed, not strength. Her hair falls to her lower back in this form, and she normally wears it up in a ponytail, minus the long, side-swept bangs.
Physical Weaknesses:
She's light-weight, built for speed, not strength. She's kind of like a cheetah, in that she has good stamina for moderate speeds, or can sprint for very short periods of time before having to stop, catch her breath, and refuel.
Biography:
She was born to Lucelia Ir'all of the ShadowPath clan, along with her sister Loria, in a faraway land (the Peruvian Amazon). Their father, Leucient Ah'riar, had died of a snake bite four months before. For her first year, she stayed with her mother and her sister, and the rest of the clan.
When Leucion and Loria were about a year and two months old, a nomadic pack decided to try to winter in the Clan's terriotories. Their mother, as the head of the PeacePath of the Council, tried to negotiate terms with the pack's alpha. The wolf refused to cooperate, he and his pack thinking they could stand against the clan. A brief war followed, and by breif I mean that it lasted about two months. The WarPath, lead by her father, and including Leucion herself, defeated the small pack, wiping them out, but not before a rebellious faction of the PeacePath seperated from the pack and left halfway through the war, sick and tired of the violent ways of the WarPath. Loria was among the dissedents. Leucion hasn't seen her since.
She spent another six months with her mother and the Clan before finally deciding that it was time to move on. After all, her mother and her had begun to argue constantly, and she didn't get along with any of the other females in the Clan, so she decided that life would be less troublign i she were on her own.
Three months ago, she found her way here, to this land, and has decided that, come hell or high water, or both, she's tired of moving around, and that she's going to stay, right here, until, and if, life presents her with some incentive to change her mind.
Personality:
Typically, she is calm and friendly. She seems rough-and-tumble on the outside, humorous, sometimes morbid, and sometimes apathetic; this is a facade. In reality, she is sensitive, easily hurt, and very emotional, but she doesn't let anyone see this side of her, because, even though she's never been hurt emotionally befre, she's still afraid of it. She is easily angered, though she usually doesn't show it. It builds up inside of her, and she does her best to resist it. When she gets reallly angry, she starts to cry silently, and that's her cue to run before she blows up and hurts herself or someone else. She is very proud, stubbornly proud, and she sometime lets it get to her head. She has a very strong will, or, at least she acts like it, and goes through with her decisions, no matter how badly she's beating herself up on the inside. She is dreadfully afraid of snakes. Her mother instilled that fear into both Leucion and Loria with the stories of how their father had died. As she never had a father figure, she craves approval from male or father-like figures when in a family or pack-like group of individuals. All in all, she is a fairly down to earth girl. Having spent so much time in such a large communal familial group, she is comfortable among crowds, and she is supportive of strict, but fair rules and a council-style government.
Skills:
She is fast, really fast, and stealthy. She knows a little about healing, but not much, and she knows how to sew (though she's not quite sure when she picked that one up). She can read in English, and write, sort of, though it's easier to read chicken-scratch than her scribbles. She's good at wood-working. She makes her own fishing spears that she fishes and hunts small game with. After all, she's built for speed, not strength, and it doesn't take much strength to throw a sharp stick at a rabbit or a fish. She also employs a slingshot for bird hunting. She can make simple furniture, like tables or chairs, but there's always room for improvement. She can climb very well, and it's sort of a hobby of her's.
Fishing spear:
pic
pic
Slingshot:
pic
Deficiencies:
She is easily angered, though she usually doesn't show it. It builds up inside of her, and she does her best to resist it. When she gets reallly angry, she starts to cry silently, and that's her cue to run before she blows up and hurts herself or someone else. She is stubbornly proud, sometimes to the point of mule-headedness and ensuing trouble. She can't swim very well, though she can float, and she's clumsy on slick ground, what with her small paws, and she also she has trouble walking in snow or sandy soil. She's dreadfully afraid of snakes.