04-25-2010, 07:52 PM
I read through your biography, and you might want to consider running it through a spell checker to fix up some grammatical and spelling errors there.
'Souls is indeed located in Nova Scotia, on the southern part of the peninsula. 'Souls refers to the lands in their entirety, as canines don't necessarily know that it is called Nova Scotia. You can see a map of the area here.
If Jaxxine ran away from her family when she was 7 months old, she would have had to be pretty close to 'Souls already. At 7 months, she'd be at about 12 years in human ages (you can see the chart on the Luperci development page of the roleplaying guide!
) so a long journey would not be too possible. She wouldn't be able to run with her mother a whole lot as a puppy, so it might be more likely that she and her mother found a safe place to live for a while until Titan caught up with them?
You also mention a desert in her history. The one I can think of is in The United States. This would take quite a bit of travelling.
For example, if they were from the Wah Wah Valley, google maps says it's 5 223 km (3245.421 mi) away from Halifax, Nova Scotia. So if a wolf spends 17 of the 24 hours travelling per day, travelling at 13 kilometres an hour, it can cover 221 kilometres per day, which will take it 23 days. So that might be when Jaxxine and her mother escape Titan the first time and make a long trek to escape him. It could be spread out over different treks, though, it does take time to walk that far, hehe.
I hope that makes sense!
As another note, you might want to try expanding on her personality a bit. How does she feel toward parental figures? Figures of authority? What does she like or dislike? Does she have any skills, abilities, strengths or weaknesses? Try to also consider her flaws. What about her might pose a problem in the future? Try thinking about how her history influenced this as well. How did travelling to escape an abusive father affect her? Disengagement and an inability to form lasting bonds with others is a good start, which you mentioned. You also said she's very loyal to a pack. Why? She's spent her life as a loner, so why is she so loyal? Does she desperately want a home where she can fit in?
There's a lot to consider, but you're off to a good start. Sorry if this is a really long post! Sometimes it can be helpful to get a lot of suggestions! So I hope this helped.
'Souls is indeed located in Nova Scotia, on the southern part of the peninsula. 'Souls refers to the lands in their entirety, as canines don't necessarily know that it is called Nova Scotia. You can see a map of the area here.
If Jaxxine ran away from her family when she was 7 months old, she would have had to be pretty close to 'Souls already. At 7 months, she'd be at about 12 years in human ages (you can see the chart on the Luperci development page of the roleplaying guide!
) so a long journey would not be too possible. She wouldn't be able to run with her mother a whole lot as a puppy, so it might be more likely that she and her mother found a safe place to live for a while until Titan caught up with them? You also mention a desert in her history. The one I can think of is in The United States. This would take quite a bit of travelling.
For example, if they were from the Wah Wah Valley, google maps says it's 5 223 km (3245.421 mi) away from Halifax, Nova Scotia. So if a wolf spends 17 of the 24 hours travelling per day, travelling at 13 kilometres an hour, it can cover 221 kilometres per day, which will take it 23 days. So that might be when Jaxxine and her mother escape Titan the first time and make a long trek to escape him. It could be spread out over different treks, though, it does take time to walk that far, hehe.
I hope that makes sense! As another note, you might want to try expanding on her personality a bit. How does she feel toward parental figures? Figures of authority? What does she like or dislike? Does she have any skills, abilities, strengths or weaknesses? Try to also consider her flaws. What about her might pose a problem in the future? Try thinking about how her history influenced this as well. How did travelling to escape an abusive father affect her? Disengagement and an inability to form lasting bonds with others is a good start, which you mentioned. You also said she's very loyal to a pack. Why? She's spent her life as a loner, so why is she so loyal? Does she desperately want a home where she can fit in?
There's a lot to consider, but you're off to a good start. Sorry if this is a really long post! Sometimes it can be helpful to get a lot of suggestions! So I hope this helped.