03-01-2011, 03:22 AM
You have an epic character here ^^ I just have one issue that I think needs to be brought up. It seems to me that The Undertaker has just so many pros and very little cons. Maybe you should even him out a bit more. He has strength, speed, and intelligence, he seems a bit overpowered to me :\ you could try giving him some more weaknesses. While I'm sure there are plenty of very intelligent insane people out there, maybe you could give him a mental disability that would help even out his strengths and weaknesses, or perhaps you could give him more severe physical injuries, such as broken bones that healed but cause him pain or something that would slow him down a bit. If you don't like these ideas, then you can visit this site for a very awesome list of weaknesses you could add to him. However, I don't mean to be rude, but having a character that is strong, fast, smart, and an assassin is a bit too much IMO.
Hope this helped ^^
Hope this helped ^^