04-10-2012, 07:47 AM
This is a problem I've know about for a long time. It bugs me a lot, but I don't know what to do about it.
I am crap at writing action. I do not know how to space things out in sentences so it shows that time has passed. Everything looks like a run-on sentence and goes far too fast when I read it. Like, I'll know that Alma has to pull an arrow out of her leg, then run away, then hide behind a bush, but then I won't know how to word so it doesn't seem like she's doing it all at once.
It'll look like this: 'Character does x, x and then x. Suddenly she does x!'
Sometimes I can break it up with thoughts. I'm trying to be more descriptive so it looks less obvious, but sometimes it still looks wrong to me.
How do I fix this?
And/or how do ya'll write action?
I am crap at writing action. I do not know how to space things out in sentences so it shows that time has passed. Everything looks like a run-on sentence and goes far too fast when I read it. Like, I'll know that Alma has to pull an arrow out of her leg, then run away, then hide behind a bush, but then I won't know how to word so it doesn't seem like she's doing it all at once.
It'll look like this: 'Character does x, x and then x. Suddenly she does x!'
Sometimes I can break it up with thoughts. I'm trying to be more descriptive so it looks less obvious, but sometimes it still looks wrong to me.
How do I fix this?
And/or how do ya'll write action?