02-06-2010, 05:57 AM
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This is good, but it's still a bit short. Your replies should be around 200 words, twice as long as you latest post. You can maybe include some of the wolf's thoughts on how Dawali looks, for example — that makes for good filling. Describing what it looks like around them is also good. Try to write more in the next post  Word Count: - The male did not respond right away, but waited, perhaps took in the Chief's appearance before replying calmly. Red-furred ears moved as they took in the sounds that came from him and sent them to the Chief's brain. He continued to look at the male as he lowered his head and his gaze in a small bow. Another one who wished to join their ranks, then. He had suspected that this was the male's goal, and now it was Dawali's turn to wait a little before replying. He had yet to learn the male's name, though he had offered him his own. "What is your name, and what skills can you offer us in return for a place among us?" Dawali's head was held high as he spoke, almost as an automatic response to the other male's submission. Any individual among others had an advantage in the battle to survive, but Dawali needed to know that the group would benefit as well. The Chief could not allow himself to take in weak links in times of war, even if his own tribe was not directly involved. Should it come to fighting, he needed to know that everyone, every single member, had a place in the mayhem. Dawali's hands rested on his hips as he waited for an answer, gaze fixed on the potential member. |